I was supposed to go under the needle again tomorrow, but as Bill worked on the design he started to have a real bad feeling about putting it on my upper arm. It seems that the design he came up with would push too much detail into areas that don’t hold details over the years.
It could still work as an upper back piece but part of having it on the arm would be to serve as a reminder that the only constant is change.
Back to the drawing board.
Saturday I got together with Melissa, Justin and David and they discussed the first twelve chapters of Picking Up the Ghost while I listened.
I came away with a list of 21 items that I should address in the third draft: More of the supporting cast, more reasons why the supporting cast is in the book at all, stronger connections between events that I thought were clear, more emoting during conversations, more emotional reactions from the main character, less semi-colons and on and on…
How about you people on the internets? Those of you who asked for copies of draft 2.5, any feedback?
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