Saturday I got together with Melissa, Justin and David and they discussed the first twelve chapters of Picking Up the Ghost while I listened.
I came away with a list of 21 items that I should address in the third draft: More of the supporting cast, more reasons why the supporting cast is in the book at all, stronger connections between events that I thought were clear, more emoting during conversations, more emotional reactions from the main character, less semi-colons and on and on…

How about you people on the internets? Those of you who asked for copies of draft 2.5, any feedback?

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  1. You left out the part where we all said it was totally cool and you undersold its awesomeness.

    Comment by mollymillions — January 14, 2008 @ 4:05 pm

  2. Oh yeah, there was that too…
    During work hours I can only see and hear criticism.

    Comment by tone_milazzo — January 14, 2008 @ 4:23 pm

  3. I’d like a draft 2.5 to read. I’m totally down to give feedback and see what’s happened to the tale since the little paperback you sent.

    Comment by inkswirls — January 14, 2008 @ 5:25 pm

  4. I’m a busy man, but I may be able to give it a look-see…

    Comment by danifesto — January 14, 2008 @ 5:36 pm

  5. I get the feeling that a lot is going to change from 2.5 to 3.0 so I’m going to hold off and maybe send you a copy of 3.0 next month.

    On second thought, that’s two months from now so I’ll just send you one now.

    Comment by tone_milazzo — January 14, 2008 @ 5:56 pm

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