Moving towards the third draft

by | Jan 14, 2008 | LiveJournal Days, Uncategorized | 5 comments

Saturday I got together with Melissa, Justin and David and they discussed the first twelve chapters of Picking Up the Ghost while I listened.
I came away with a list of 21 items that I should address in the third draft: More of the supporting cast, more reasons why the supporting cast is in the book at all, stronger connections between events that I thought were clear, more emoting during conversations, more emotional reactions from the main character, less semi-colons and on and on…

How about you people on the internets? Those of you who asked for copies of draft 2.5, any feedback?

5 Comments

  1. mollymillions
    mollymillions on January 14, 2008 at 4:05 pm

    You left out the part where we all said it was totally cool and you undersold its awesomeness.

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  2. tone_milazzo
    tone_milazzo on January 14, 2008 at 4:23 pm

    Oh yeah, there was that too…
    During work hours I can only see and hear criticism.

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  3. inkswirls
    inkswirls on January 14, 2008 at 5:25 pm

    I’d like a draft 2.5 to read. I’m totally down to give feedback and see what’s happened to the tale since the little paperback you sent.

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  4. danifesto
    danifesto on January 14, 2008 at 5:36 pm

    I’m a busy man, but I may be able to give it a look-see…

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  5. tone_milazzo
    tone_milazzo on January 14, 2008 at 5:56 pm

    I get the feeling that a lot is going to change from 2.5 to 3.0 so I’m going to hold off and maybe send you a copy of 3.0 next month.

    On second thought, that’s two months from now so I’ll just send you one now.

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