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Saturday I got together with Melissa, Justin and David and they discussed the first twelve chapters of Picking Up the Ghost while I listened.
I came away with a list of 21 items that I should address in the third draft: More of the supporting cast, more reasons why the supporting cast is in the book at all, stronger connections between events that I thought were clear, more emoting during conversations, more emotional reactions from the main character, less semi-colons and on and on…
How about you people on the internets? Those of you who asked for copies of draft 2.5, any feedback?
You left out the part where we all said it was totally cool and you undersold its awesomeness.
Oh yeah, there was that too…
During work hours I can only see and hear criticism.
I’d like a draft 2.5 to read. I’m totally down to give feedback and see what’s happened to the tale since the little paperback you sent.
I’m a busy man, but I may be able to give it a look-see…
I get the feeling that a lot is going to change from 2.5 to 3.0 so I’m going to hold off and maybe send you a copy of 3.0 next month.On second thought, that’s two months from now so I’ll just send you one now.