February 24, 2008 Going into the third draft.
After listening to the recordings we made of our first and second workshops and reading the annotations on
For those of you who have read the second draft that means I’m losing any reference to the Half-Way World/Purgatory, most of the scene in the meatworks (including the Cowboy and the ladder-in-the-pit), the entire water dream will be replaced and the scene with Iku in the church will be completely rewritten. And there will be far fewer semi-colons.
I will be adding: More of the supporting cast in the second half, especially Cinque’s family. The importance of Cinque’s interactions with the supernatural characters will be more explicit. More emoting during conversations. More St Jude in the second half. More of the bad guy in the first half. More race and father issues throughout both halves.
The workshoper thought that I had drawn on The Adventure of Huckleberry Finn for influence so I decided to finaly read it to see what they were talking about. Both stories take place along the Mississippi and I have a Mark Twain quote in the first chapter. Strangest of all, Tom Sawyer briefly uses the alias “William Thompson” which is the name of one of my main characters.